EDITING LOG
Roger Yu
Editing Log
Professor Gill-Mayberry
ENG 105 8am-9:50 am
“The best writing is re-writing”
Editing Log
1. Principle: Unnecessary word. Exclude extraneous words.
Original: I have learned the Lesson 1 gives the instruction on how to introduce ourselves using Blackboard and an overview of the class.
Revision: I have learned Lesson 1 gives the instruction on how to introduce ourselves using Blackboard and an overview of the class.
2. Principle: Repetition. Search for new words to replace restatements.
Original: It also gave instructions on our reading activity, which are the Home Page and the Syllabus. It also emphasized on a quiz that will be handed out about the syllabus and class policies on the class calendar.
Revision: It also gave instructions on our reading activity, which are the Home Page and the Syllabus. This page emphasized on a quiz that will be handed out about the syllabus and class policies on the class calendar.
3. Principle: Typos. Proofread to prevent typos.
Original: The purpose of Lesson 1 is to inform the students what is needed to pass lesson one with a passing grab by giving specific instructions on what to do and what Professor Gill Mayberry is looking for.
Revision: The purpose of Lesson 1 is to inform the students what is needed to pass lesson one with a passing grade by giving specific instructions on what to do and what Professor Gill Mayberry is looking for.
4. Principle: Pronoun Adjective agreement.
Original: I have learned the name of our most honorable instructor, writing coach, and guide for this English 105 Freshmen II composition hybrid-in-progress class as Professor Barbara Gill-Mayberry.
Revision: I have learned the name of our most honorable instructor, writing coach, and guide for this English 105 Freshmen II composition hybrid-in-progress class is Professor Barbara Gill-Mayberry.
5. Principle: Single subjects vs. Plural subjects
Original: One way Professor Mayberry gets to know others are by telling others something about her many others do not know.
Revision: One way Professor Mayberry gets to know others is by telling others something about her many others do not know.
6. Principle: Word choices. Use better vocabularies
Original: Face- to- face meetings indicated students must be active on making appointments and socialize with the many teach assistances available to further improve rhetorical and writing skills.
Revision: Face- to- face meetings indicated students must be active on making appointments and socialize with the many teaching assistants available to further improve rhetorical and writing skills.
7. Principle: Add details and examples to prove a point.
Original: Class Orientation is meant to help students get prepared for the course material both mentally and physically.
Revision: Students need to be mentally clear and physically ready. Class Orientation is meant to help students get prepared for the course material both mentally and physically.
8. Principle: Unclear statement. Specify vague pronoun references.
Original: My purpose is to convince those who think gun control should be loosened or eliminated and that this is the prevailing stance on the topic of gun control.
Revision: My purpose is to convince those who think gun control should be loosened or eliminated and that enforcing gun control laws is the prevailing stance.